Not conductive to the muse. So I am editing. I finished incorporating Katie's edits into Forging a Legend--thanks, Katie!-- and now I am polishing. Lots of things have changed since 2005, when I wrote this novel, including my word choices. So I'm going through the whole thing, paragraph by paragraph. The lovely Lisa and Kristin have both volunteered to reread it when I am finished. I don't know what it is about this book; I'm just not willing to give it up.
Regarding East of Yesterday: I'm feeling grateful that I had a grandparent born in 1895. She was very old when I was in high school--much older than my friends' grandmothers. No one else had a grandparent born in the previous century. She had WONDERFUL stories when I was growing up. She always called Woolworth's the "five and dime". I learned all about the lunch counters that they used to have there, and various other details I was able to incorporate in this brief scene:
A waitress stopped before him. "What's your name?" she asked.
"Mike," he said before he remembered to use his last name.
She seemed unfazed by his informality. "Well, Mr. Mike--what'll it be?"
"Oh, some coffee and scrambled eggs, I guess."
Someone joined him on his right. "Morning," he said as he opened his paper.
Mike glanced at him. He was in a suit similar to his. "Morning," he replied.
The waitress thumped a teacup and saucer before him, and filled it with coffee. He looked around for creamer, but all he saw was a little metal milk pitcher. He took it and poured some in, then dug some sugar cubes out of a bowl with a spoon and dropped them in.
He decided to start his housekeeper search here. He would probably be seeing these men every morning, after all. It would be a step above hiring someone through an ad.
"Anyone know of someone looking for a housekeeper job?"
Silence. Then a "Nope," and a "Not me."
Mike stirred his coffee and wondered how long it would take for the sugar cubes to dissolve.
"If you don't mind a Negro, I know someone," the guy on his left said.
And ugh--an agent has had the complete MS for Starcaster for almost four months!
I like your scene! Especially the bit about him not remembering to use his last name. I remember my Freshman year at college - several weeks into the year when we were all "best of friends" in the dorm, but realized we didn't know anyone's last name. It's so indicative of a change in culture.
ReplyDeleteHS'ing is a continuing debate in our house. It comes right after the "can we afford tuition this year" debate. I feel for you. ;) It's tough work. Good job, Mom!
Thank you, Robin! When I joined the military, during basic training we all used each other's last name and no one knew anyone's first name.
ReplyDeleteThat was our very debate. Tuition for special needs children is frightful. We just finished Vicky's assessment test for English. I'm not sure how to grade her. In one section, she was supposed to write out the word based on the picture. When she saw what they probably intended to be a "horn", she spelled out "trumpet." I can't mark that as incorrect, can I? That just wouldn't be fair.
How is it that I keep encountering other homeschooling writer moms online? This will be our first year homeschooling, too. I hope things go well for you!
ReplyDeleteI love your scene. :) I was a homeschooled kid. I love my mom for all the work she put into me (not that I wouldn't have loved her anyway...) I can see how it would be a daunting idea, though.
ReplyDeleteWell I know why you shouldn't give up on Forging A Legend! It's brilliant! It would be injustice NOT to keep trying
ReplyDelete4 months! Let's hope it's in a long queue of books.
Thank you, Lisa!! You always make me feel so good about my writing! I hope you like my rewrite.
ReplyDeleteChatter on Absolute Write concerning this agent leads me to believe she is amassing manuscripts. Maybe she plans to take them with her on vacation.