Once I wrote it, I knew I just had to find a way to open the story with it. And I did. I introduce most of the principal characters along with some principal villains.
Here's a scene from a later chapter, where Tory describes this mission to another character:
"Well, I was supposed to deliver a decoding disk to an operative who was working out of the Tarquil Embassy as a domestic servant. He was a Gold Corps operative. He didn't keep his appointment to meet me, so I snuck into the Embassy, located him and delivered the disk."
"You were starcasting?"
"No. This was during the day."
"How did you do it?"
"Well, I speak fluent Tarquillan. I disguised myself as a servant and talked my way inside. He was working as a footman, so it was not difficult once I was inside."
"How did you get back out?"
"I tried to talk my way back out, but I had not considered that they would not let me out again. I was told to get back to work. So I busied myself with chores until nightfall, and managed to steal a battle map in the meantime. It detailed plans to ambush a ship in the Straights. I was almost caught, but I managed to get away. Later, our navy was able to ambush the ambushers."
It's action-packed, with high stakes and narrow escapes. I'm having lots of fun with it.
action packed is good. do you feel like you've finally nailed down your opening chapter?
ReplyDeleteBy the time people get to this chapter, do they know exactly what starcasting can do?
I tried to introduce starcasting, the setting, the major characters and the big-picture conflict in this scene.
ReplyDeleteI don't use traditional chapters, but it comes to about sixteen double-spaced pages.
How do you represent 'chapters'?
ReplyDeleteInstead of chapters, I have time stamps and locations, thriller style. for example:
ReplyDeleteWednesday, 1:45 PM
The Clock Tower
Some of them are only a few pages apart.